June 9th (about essay...)

okay...no one should not read this blog cause it might be soooo boring!!
I just wanted to write this because this was the only thing I remember about wednesday,
and wanted to organize my plan for the essay.

in Wednesday's class, we had a discussion, I mean, kind of a debate thing again,
but this time about our own topic of the essay.

before the class, I already knew that although I've written the body part of my essay, my thesis statement was kind of obscure and was not really argumentative.
but during the class, Rab told me the topic was okay that some people might be against my thesis.

another problem was, that my first paragraph and the second one looked similar.
actually, main idea of two were different, and Rab also said that in the tutorial time too.
i was worried and afraid to hear from rab that i have to rewrite the second paragraph.
But,
what rab told me was to switch the order of the three paragraph.

I was putting the three in the order of how strong and persuasive they were (like rab told us, 1 strong, 2 least strong, 3 strongest)
but rab said to me that how those three paragraphs connects and flows smoothly is rather important.

so i switched the first one to be the second.
I was amazed because three paragraphs actually flowed really well and got more coherent too.